1. My audience was a cookie manufacturer and I approached them calmly but clearly. I complained that their cookies are always broken in the package. What I thought about was why all the cookies were broken.
2. I followed the format from the text book. It helped me arrange my paragraphs.
3. It needs to be longer and I could have picked a better topic. But I think I got the point across
i like how you approached them calmly, sometimes that works better instead of when people are really mad and approach someone in a negative way. the format from the textbook definitly helped a lot of us out i think. i used that too, than when we did the letter of complaint in class that helped me to write my letter as well. it was like practice. if you thought you could have picked a better topic, why didnt you? i believe your topic is good though with a valid point.
ReplyDeletemy topic was kinda last minute and different from what i had in my what makes you mad scenario. i think if i used the information from that it would have been longer but i liked the topic i used.
ReplyDeleteJason, What kind of cookies are they? Do you think it has to do with the ingredients, rough packaging, long shelf time etc? Do you mention this specifically in your letter?
ReplyDeletei touched on a few of those things but those are good ideas
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